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Showing posts with label workshops. Show all posts
Showing posts with label workshops. Show all posts

Saturday, August 2, 2008

We have winners!



As you can see from the sign Teddy is holding, he randomly picked three winners from comments that were posted over the past 5 days of the workshop. He drew them out of the bowl with his claws, which are due for a serious trimming. Congratulations to Crystal Quartz, Calico Kelsey and Ester Jade! You'll each receive one of these books:
WRITING THE NOVEL FROM PLOT TO PRINT by Lawrence Block, HOW TO WRITE KILLER FICTION by Carolyn Wheat, or PLOTTING AND WRITING SUSPENSE FICTION by Patricia Highsmith. Please email me at jkduvall at bendbroadband dot com with your snail mail address so I can mail you your prize.

Well, I had an awesome week last week, despite Friday's Blogger drama of getting locked out of my blog. It totally ruined my day. But I'm back on track now and will blog normally again beginning on Monday. I hope you'll come back to visit.

Thank you for participating in my workshop. I enjoyed reading your talented homework assignments, and I hope you all had fun and learned something, too. I've given a variety of in-person writing workshops over the years, but this is my first ever online. This workshop worked out so well that I'll likely give another one. I have a workshop on the secondary character hierarchy (yes, there really is one, but it's my invention so you'll have to take my word for it) and one on discovering your storyteller's voice. So you may see one of these here in the future.

If you ever plan to attend a writer's conference, where all the workshops are fabulous, I highly recommend Rocky Mountain Fiction Writers' Colorado Gold. The next one is September 12-14, 2008 and you can learn more about it here.

Happy writing!

Friday, August 1, 2008

Day 5 – Sense of Touch

We feel things on the inside and the outside, but for the purpose of description and the tactile sense of touch, I won't go too far into the emotional end of things. All description should affect emotion regardless, so I don't want to compartmentalize it. However, someone really ought to do a weeklong workshop on emotion by itself. Don't you think?

So where was I? Oh, yes, tactile sensations…

What does your body feel at this very moment? It's early evening here in Bend, Oregon, and a light breeze flutters in through the open sliding glass door, cooling my ankles and my calves. My thighs are warmed by the laptop I've had sitting on them practically all day. I just cracked open a birthday beer, a Wailua Wheat Ale that's flavored with Passion fruit, and it's quite yummy. I feel relaxed and calm as I listen to my husband play his guitar on the patio.

If I were a book character, someone would break into my home right about now, shoot my husband and my dog, and successfully shake me from my complacent world. That's what fiction does. It stirs up trouble because reading about contented people is boring.

Like sight, the sense of touch fairly dominates our work. Our characters are always feeling things, inside and out, and expressing those feelings can be a challenge. The touch of a calloused hand might mean strength and provide a sense of security, or it could be a threat. Your words will sculpt the character's state of mind and drive her to action.

Continuing with our scene we started on Monday:

The tile was green and shiny. The air smelled like a swamp. Lisa heard footsteps coming closer. She bit the sleeve of her shirt to keep from crying out. She hurt so bad she thought she would faint.

And the better way:

Green tile glistened in the sunlight. A humid scent like wet moss and mud floated on the air. Footsteps sloshed through a puddle of standing water, forcing Lisa farther back into the bushes where she hid. She gasped, then chomped down on her shirt sleeve to stop herself from screaming. The filthy cloth filled her mouth with the taste of blood; the gash in her arm had yet to stop bleeding. Dizzy enough to pass out, Lisa gritted her teeth against the blazing pain of her wound and clamped her fingers around her arm to stanch the bleeding.

Our lovely Lisa is in dire straits. Help better come soon or she's a goner.

DO use concrete images when describing touch. When it comes to tactile senses, it's important to include physical objects in your description to avoid filling it in with too many thoughts and feelings. Emotions alone are telling, and when you use too much you risk boring the reader. You can really put the skids on a well-paced story when you stop the action to explain how a character feels.

DON'T use sentimentality and melodrama to express description. Things like "She was wracked with grief" and "His happiness knew no bounds" will get you rejected so fast your head will spin. No kidding. This is a pitfall of generous description so be careful! Edit your prose with a machete and measure your modifiers to avoid overwriting. Above all, avoid pathetic fallacy, which means do not ascribe human emotions to natural phenomena or inanimate objects. Example: The flowers danced with vicarious joy. That's just silly. Keep it real.

Examples of using the sense of touch in description:

The cool breeze had brushed against his brow a second time, and something about the way it touched him seemed like a sign. As though the breeze was saying look, look…
Galilee by Clive Barker

I jerked my head to one side, gasping, and felt the duct tape pull as he cut it barely a quarter inch from my neck. I felt the cold kiss of the knife drag down and bury itself shallowly in the skin of my shoulder.
Windfall by Rachel Caine

His claws sliced through my jacket, his hot breath bathing my neck as the room's cool air chilled my bloody back. Shui hovered close, inhaling my scent, one claw tracing an immature wing that struggled to break free.
Knight's Curse (not yet published) by Karen Duvall

Homework Assignment: Let's play a game. You'll need someone to help, like a spouse, family member or friend. Close your eyes, or better yet, blindfold yourself, and ask your friend or loved one to hand you an object. You can't see it, but you can feel it. Maybe you can smell it. Just focus on what it feels like in your hands, its weight and texture. Now write about the experience in 100 words or less. It can be from either your point of view, or the POV of a character in a story you're working on. Don't be afraid to combine other senses, but focus on touch for this exercise. Post your creation in the comments section. If you prefer to choose something from your WIP that you feel is an effective use of touch, that's fine, too.

Well, that concludes this week-long workshop for Writing Effective Description Using the Five Senses. I hope you found it helpful, as well as fun. Writing should always be a joyful experience. Please come back to my blog some time for a visit and to say hello. On Saturday I'll draw three names from those who commented and announce the winners on my blog, so be sure to stop by to find out if you won. I'll need to know where to mail your prize.

Happy writing, everyone!

Thursday, July 31, 2008

Day 4 -- Sense of Taste


Yummy, yummy, yummy I got love in my tummy… Oh. Ahem. This tune just started humming in my head and I couldn’t stop myself from sharing. I sure hope I didn't get it started in yours, too.

Taste. We have sweet, sour, bitter and salty. But what does that mean for our writing? There's plenty of symbolism here, and we can use it to its full advantage. Taste can be literal, of course, but unless your characters spend a lot of time eating and drinking, it's a rare sense in description. That doesn't mean you can't use it in other ways.

Taste is often combined with scent since we can't experience flavor without our sense of smell. And we taste things other than food, too. How about the taste of a lover's lips? A taste of salty air from the sea? I don't know about you, but the odor of fertilizer leaves a horrible taste in my mouth that clings to the back of my tongue. I have to hold my breath when I walk through the gardening section of a store. Chemical fertilizers are even worse.

Like smell, tastes can free up memories lodged for years in our brains. That's why we have comfort foods. And mood foods. Let's not forget about chocolate! As far as chocolate goes, some say it's an aphrodisiac. Studies show that a preference for chocolate is a chemical signature that may be programmed into our metabolic systems. The feeling we get from eating chocolate has been compared to the feeling of being in love. Aphrodisiac foods abound.

If we're not tasting food, what else can we taste? Blood is popular with vampires, and there's also the flavor of a lover's skin. People who chew on their hair will likely get a taste of shampoo, and nail biters probably come in contact with all kinds of interesting flavors (ick). Did you ever have your mouth washed out with soap? I never had the pleasure, but was certainly threatened with it a time or two as a kid.

Think of all these flavors to describe, and how you'd do it. Especially if you never tasted something before. Would you have a taste of something just so you could describe it better? Or would you take someone's word for it?

Because it's such a unique descriptor, use taste sparingly, and make it count when you do.

Ready to take another look at the sample scene we've been working on all week?

The tile was green and shiny. The air smelled like a swamp. Lisa heard footsteps coming closer. She bit the sleeve of her shirt to keep from crying out.

Now adding to our improved version:

Green tile glistened in the sunlight. A humid scent like wet moss and mud floated on the air. Footsteps sloshed through a puddle of standing water, forcing Lisa farther back into the bushes where she hid. She gasped, then chomped down on her shirt sleeve to stop herself from screaming. The filthy cloth filled her mouth with the taste of blood; the gash in her arm had yet to stop bleeding.

Okay, so I lean toward the suspense side of fiction. I hope that's okay with you all because I can't help myself. We've added the sense of taste and it's not a pleasant one. I'm caring more about poor Lisa here. Not only is she hiding from someone, she's hurt, too. You've heard it said that tension should be on every page. No matter what the genre, it's true. Your characters should never feel completely relaxed because there's always trouble brewing just around the corner. Effective description can help you keep the tension high.

DO elevate the mundane with comparisons and contrasts. No matter what sense you're using, you can take something as ordinary as a pig farm and make the hoof-marked mud harden into a surface reminiscent of an elegant, pressed-tin ceiling. Push your creative engine into overdrive now and then. You'll surprise yourself with what you can come up with.

DON'T abuse your thesaurus. It can be a helpful tool, but it can't make a silk tie out of a sow's tail. *grin* If you can't find the right word to describe your heroine's gazebo, go find a gazebo and sit in it yourself for a while to experience what you'd like to describe.

I apologize for the slim pickings on my bookshelf for examples of using the sense of taste in description:

After breakfasting on a slice of antediluvian ham and an egg of uncertain age, he continues on his way. Few others are abroad; he passes a wagon, an axeman felling a dead tree in his field, a labourer pissing into the ditch. Wisps of mist float here and there above the fields, dissipating like dreams in the rising light.
Alias Grace by Margaret Atwood

A campfire blazed at the center of Star Mother’s camp, the cultists swarming around it to partake of the evening meal. He remembered from childhood the huge vats of tasteless bean soup that was served night after night. He was told to be patient because scrumptious feasts awaited them on Atria. He never believed it. What he did believe was that once Star Mother’s church put its suicide plan into effect, you couldn’t eat anything when you were dead.
Desert Guardian by Karen Duvall

Homework Assignment: How brave are you? Would you be willing to taste something new? That's your challenge, and then write about the experience in 100 words or less. If that's too daring, go ahead and describe either the worst or the best taste you've ever experienced (and survived to tell about). It can be from either your point of view, or the POV of a character in a story you're working on. Don't be afraid to combine other senses, but focus on taste for this exercise. Post your creation in the comments section. If you prefer to choose something from your WIP that you feel is an effective use of taste, that's fine, too.

Sunday, July 27, 2008

Left Behind Workshop Week

We're all calling it something different, I think, but the essence of these workshops is they're for fiction writers, they're free, and they're open to the public. Next week is RWA's annual conference, and those left behind shouldn't have to be deprived of fun and educational workshops to help hone their skills.

Here are some of the online writing workshops available to anyone inclined to participate:

The annual NGTCC (Not Going To Conference Conference). This one is free, but you must register with Romance Divas in order to participate. They'll have other authors, agents, and editors as guests.

Paperback Writer is hosting her 3rd annual Left Behind & Loving It Conference with daily workshops.

Not Going To Frisco: Writing Biz Reality. Her Logo for her workshop depicts the best thing about staying at home: no high heels required. Guys, I guess you never have to worry about this problem, but you can picture her logo with a necktie instead. 8^)

Erotica author Sasha White will be presenting Voice: The Magic Behind the Words on her blog.

I look forward to seeing you all next week for my workshop on writing effective description. I'll cover the basics, provide some dos and don'ts, offer examples from others' books, and give a writing exercise each day of the week for each of the five senses. So sharpen your pencils, or uh, prime your keyboards, and get ready for some homework. Ha!

Saturday, July 26, 2008

Weekend Wordiness


Well, I blew off all last week when it came to blogging, but I had a good reason. I was working! Hard! Though I'd rather be writing -- always -- I do have to help bring home the bacon and there's a considerably tough project overflowing my plate for the next few weeks. Aargh!

However, my plan for a weeklong workshop on writing description is still on! Yeah! My lessons are all written out and ready to post, one for each day of the week, and for each of the five senses.

Due to the workshop, I won't be blogging my usual every day (last week doesn't count). If I was doing Marketing Monday, I'd let you all know that my agent will start submitting Knight's Curse to publishers next week! Squeee! She's working on the pitch letter now and we'll talk in a few days. I'm so excited I can hardly stand it.

If you're looking for something to do next spring that takes you off the beaten path, introduces you to some gorgeous Central Oregon scenery, and is educational for the "write" minded, you might want to attend my weekend writing workshop at Elk Lake Resort. The resort called me last week to ask if I'd be interested in giving a workshop there, and of course I said YES! Elk Lake is about 45 minutes from Bend, Oregon, at the base of Mount Bachelor, and the cabins are adorable. It would be a small workshop, so attendance would be limited and include lodging and some meals. We haven't ironed out the details yet, but I'll be posting updates as they happen. I'll probably host a contest with workshop registration being the prize. Stay tuned!

Speaking of workshops, don't forget Rocky Mountain Fiction Writers' Colorado Gold conference is coming up in September. It's the absolute best for fiction writers. I'll be co-presenter with Jeanne Stein on a workshop for writing urban fantasy, and I'll be giving a workshop on networking with online resources for writers. The conference is not only educational, but it also offers a fabulous opportunity to pitch to agents and editors. There are few slots left open for appointments, so register now before it's too late. The Rocky Mountains are gorgeous in the fall. I hope to see some of you there!